Wednesday, 19 March 2014

2nd draft

Learning partners comment.
Feedback: I like the paragraphs because it makes more scenes because you did different ideairs.  
Feed forward: it is too good.
From Ella 
Feed back: I like your story so much and your detail it is very good.
Feed forward: wow
From Aalaa

1 comment:

  1. Great writing Aye. I can visualise your caving experience.